Hello， Everyone！I just completed my language, mathematics, English language training, but also take care of my back garden, and you?Although the present study is a busy, almost about final exams, and teacher assignments are more, but I will arrange my time and reasonable, taking time to learn on my favorite in China xuele!My believe is the same as it all, now about 61 Children''s Day, and also rehearsed show it, for example: singing, dancing, piano .... But we do not forget to learn here, I believe we all can time to come! Come on!I am very happy, very excited, because my back garden, grade has been 23 . We are not envy me? Haha, then you should make efforts, I think you can quickly upgrade! In fact, very simple to upgrade, you should express more work, more work for other students to vote, do more exercises on it, is not it simple? I am sure you will be able to do!Well, I want to go to lunch slightly, to take a nap after dinner, until 2 o''clock when I was going to school. Tomorrow is the weekend, I hope you come here to learn more Oh, also I wish you all a nice weekend！名师点评：这篇文章小作者讲述了自己的一些琐事，表达出了自己的快乐，让读者感受到了小作者的乐观开朗。首先小作者告诉读者自己刚完成数学、英语等科目的训练，来到后花园玩。虽然告诉读者虽然自己学习很忙，但还是会来学乐中国学习，而且还欣喜地告诉读者自己的后花园升到23级了，鼓励读者也多努力，这样就很容易升上来了。最后小作者告诉自己要去吃午饭了，然后要休息一会儿，直到下午两点钟去学校。第二天是周末，小作者还祝大家周末愉快。作为一篇英语作文，小作者这篇文章条理清晰，叙述生动，写得还是不错的。但文章也存在一些错误，小作者要注意下。“Although the present study is a busy”建议改为“Although i am busy at study”。“My believe is the same as it all, now about 61 Children''''s Day”这句话是个病句，意思没有表达清楚，六一儿童节要写成“happy children''s day”。“We are not envy me?”改为“Do you envy me?”“also I wish you all a nice weekend”改为“also I wish you all have a nice weekend”。（学乐中国特聘教师：王运连老师）2010-6-11 19:46:00